English

Topic: Analyse and evaluate the work of a recognised graphic designer. Illustrate your account withexamples, showing how they have influnced your work.

1) The title AND introduction makes no sense. Give an idea why you would like to compare a professional’s work with an aspiring one like yours.

2) Still no clear thesis presented in the introduction. Example: Seymour Chwast is a Pop Surrealist illustrator / SC succeeded thanks to Push Pin/ etc.

3) Referencing in-text and bibliography should not capitalize names. Missing comma in in-text.

4) Comparison with his own design work is vague – illustrated and compare his work with the designer and explain

5) English writing is still informal or inconsistent in quality.

6) Demonstrate your knowledge of design and art history or issues by: briefly relating the designer to other designers / other design or art movements (Dada/ Surrealism/Bauhaus…?/Swiss)

7) Possible plagiarism issue, especially introduction.